I REALLY like this story!
This is where i do my constructive criticism
however, there isnt much to do!
The literary techiques are all spot on, especially the cliff-hanger at the end of the first chapter
I also like the way the characters are shown, if the LH had gone onto other series, i could see this kind of Motoko "lite" version coming through, as well as a stronger figure in Keitaro.
Please, please keep writing, its a credit to this site
well done